Patreon October 2019 Critique by Troy David Loy
Agnimalya October 2019 Critique
Duties Tandra has a problem relating to her husband. In this piece, her sister Chandra gives her advice on how to fix that. I liked this one, particularly the wrap up at the last line.
Elevator Sanjay and Debotosh have an interesting relationship, one is the braggart, the other the passive listener. When Sanjay claims to have come to great wealth through marriage, Sanjay’s colleagues get suspicious. What’s really going on here? What of Sanjay’s bride, Ragini? What of Sanjay’s ambitions? Debotosh gets the better deal out of this, while Sanjay crashes and burns! Exceedingly cool!
Evil Python Three older women tell the tale of an evil fellow and a virtuous girl, of how he hounded her, and failed to snag his prey. Interesting.
Eyes Tilak and Chandan work together, and when a girl at the office starts messaging Chandan, Tilak decides to steal the girl for himself! It doesn’t work out very well for Tilak and Chandan becomes his boss years later, when Tilak’s deceptions are exposed! Chandan is the one who wins out here!
Fairy Bride A fellow hangs out at an enchanted lake, and hatches a plan to wed a fairy by first stealing her wings. His idea works, at first, but his bride is miserable, and he’s not doing well either. This ends poorly for the fellow when the fairy bride turns on him and his neighbors in a most unpleasant way!
Faith Abhirup and Sunetra have a discussion of on the matter of romance, one with a questionable woman that both know to varying degrees, with the higher degree being Sunetra’s knowledge. But is this really the case? Abhirup finds out in a pleasant way when the evidence speaks for itself!
Fake Pearls Mrs. Majumdar has difficulty marrying off her son, on account of his preferences, and hatches an extortion scam to fix this! This was enjoyable, even with difficulty telling who was who toward the end.
Fake Tapan, Debam, and Debamita are involved in a complicated dance of romance and deception. When Tapan enlists his brother to help him rope in Debamita, things go bad for Tapan, when Debam and Debamita fall for each other, leaving Tapan out of the equation, and loveless as a deceptive, scheming little brat.
Fateful evening Sithi is suddenly worried for her marriage after a phone call seemingly from an old flame of her husband’s, and an unexpected taxi trip causes her to fear for her and her daughter’s lives! But this one ends well, with a nice twist at the end – well done!
Father Mr. Mitra’s children, now adults, are angry, among other less pleasant feelings for their father, over, of all things, his desire to remarry in his later years. But young Tina puts their selfishness in full view with a few harsh but well placed words. This one ends nicely!
Oh father! A scheming daughter and equally scheming father hatch a plan, but does the daughter consent to the plot? She does, and this opens the possibility of a further instalment.
Coming Kingdom October 2019 Critique
Fire Shanta is experiencing strange things, while her husband Mridul dismisses them, but soon he begins to see, hear, and feel the same things! Who, or what, is their ghostly visitor, and what does it want? In an apparently cursed flat, the couple decides to leave, and move somewhere safer!
Fluffy Young Rick is being followed by something…a hungry puppy he feeds outside of his community’s gate, and with moving impending, he decides to adopt him. All went well with this one. Very heart-warming!
Game of Love Shruti decides to play with a colleague’s heart to clear the field for her own romantic designs on her boss. Entrapping young Shree, and tampering with her work, things look pretty grim for Shree’s situation. When their plan involves playing with her boss’s heart, Shruti wins out…or DOES she? Years later, the payback hits when Shruti’s husband learns the whole story.
Ghouls Mr. Ramatosh has a problem; his daughter has been abducted, and the threats for silence keep coming in. When he sees her in a newspaper a year later, he reads of her death.
Give and Take Jyotika and Pallavi talk of marriage and unrequited love from an old flame. It does nothing to sway Jyotika, nor is it intended to. Some conversations need to be had nonetheless!
Golden Dreams When Deepak lands a job in Afghanistan, things seem well for his future, and in finding a husband for his sister back in India. But something is terribly amiss when it becomes obvious that things are not as they seem! Can it be that he was lured to Kabul by unscrupulous men, to be dumped after falling into a trap?
Grandpa Little Mina needs a present for her Grandpa, something pretty with a flowery fragrance! This one ends on a happy note!
The Great Outing When a married couple decides not to have children, all seems well for them, until their second honeymoon, when they find–gasp–actual children during the trip!
Greed A widower wants to remarry, and he knows who he and his daughter love, but his mother and sister reject her for another, one with a larger dowry. Lust for wealth can be the downfall of any arrangements for a spouse!
Guilt A hit and run accident spurs a while spent elsewhere for safety. While the guilty party avoids even the long arm of the law, this proves an exercise in character building he won’t forget!
Handcuffs A “family business” of questionable ethics winds up getting a lot of people in deep trouble, only to have one of their own land in the hands of the police.
Handsome Conjuror Shilpi meets a handsome photographer, and suddenly, her husband’s bank account is haemorrhaging money! What’s going on here? It turns out that Shilpi’s been blackmailed, and the photographer is a bit looser than he appears when first met, but Shilpi’s husband comes to the rescue once he gets the full story. I rather enjoyed this one!
SBPnB October 2019 Critique
Hatred Raj and Arindam are colleagues, and rivals, the one hot-tempered, the other a venomous schemer. What happens when that rivalry leads to broken hearts, and whose?
He An abandoned man, homeless and hungry, wanders the roads begging for alms. But one day he comes upon a home whose residents change his life, and this time for the better!
His choice Jyotishko, Ramendra, and Debesh are close friends. When Ramendra dies, leaving behind his only daughter, Tamalika, his two living friends seek a suitable husband for her, a thing that despite a few setbacks with Debesh’s sons, works out well by the end!
Holding hands Mehul runs into trouble on a rainy day, trouble addressed by a protector, who becomes much more to her months afterward. Excellent!
Ideal match The Wicked Three tell the story of a marriage that may or may not last, with interesting relationship dynamics!
Imitation The Wicked Three make another appearance, this time gossiping over a rivalry between two younger women, and a mimicry of one by the other out of malice!
Innocent love Animesh and Rita have an unusual marriage, one with open secrets if there be such a thing! Rita misses her husband deeply, and finds out more of her husband’s past, a story that leads to a happier outcome!
Insane A marriage can be a complicated thing. When one man falls in love with another woman, he suffers, but endures, loyalty to his wife despite loving another woman. Is his wife truly insane for letting him go? NOT!
It’s my life Reshmi and Prabhat are asked to marry, but tragedy strikes in their relationship, and Reshmi marries another. With a sick mother and sister, Prabhat recovers, and falls for his nurse Maya. Will he marry an older woman, however young she looks? This one ends happily!